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Dead.Carousel by ~starweaver:iconstarweaver:





Step right up, all you children
to the carousel of souls
where light, it will unravel
and the horrors will unfold

Come ride upon the demon steed with deadly chilling eyes
feel your life force drain away
for all who ride here die

hear the haunting music that heralds your demise
heed the chill of thick black fog
and the banshee's piercing cry

The shadows draw you closer
with fingers cracked and broken
the cold pierces right through you
not a single word is spoken

your soul is taken 'gainst your will
on a hell-bound horror ride
in a circle of that's eternal
on the carousel you'll ride

so step up, all you children
hearken to its spell do not ignore the siren song
of the deadly carousel
©2004-2008 ~starweaver
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Submitted: April 29, 2004
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Lousyass poem to go with the lousyass pictuah.

Now we know why Mellie doesn't write poetry often! ;D

*Hint* Concentrate on the images the words invoke rather than the words themselves. It may be better that way. I dunno o_O

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~Green814:iconGreen814: Apr 29, 2004, 5:11:55 PM
Very good poem. Great rhyme scheme and imagery!
~AngelsEulogy:iconAngelsEulogy: Apr 29, 2004, 5:19:07 PM
i don't know what you're talking about regarding the "lousyass"-ness of this. it's great, and has a wonderfully macabre sort of feeling that is just so perfectly perverse. did i mention i love it?

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~firekittie:iconfirekittie: Apr 29, 2004, 5:21:29 PM
Awesome.. more poetry! ^.^ Great job, Keep it up!
~Pokoa:iconPokoa: Apr 29, 2004, 5:22:19 PM
great rhyming, some phrase actually gave me shivers, i love when a poem does that to me, that means you have a talent with words, you should write more.

it has nice images and i can really relate it to your artwork also, which is really cool.

its like i read it and i can see the carousel in purple and black and red...

Yay a second poem going straight to my favorites.
~raijan:iconraijan: Apr 29, 2004, 5:32:27 PM
This sounds very evil to me. :evillaugh: Nice rose. And the poem is hecked.

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I have a penis~ Therefore I am evil.
~nightwulf:iconnightwulf: Apr 29, 2004, 5:36:15 PM
That is a really niffty rhyming scheme and it's a good desription poem. The picture that it creates is really breath taking. Good job Mellie! ^-^
~kararewolf:iconkararewolf: Apr 29, 2004, 5:45:50 PM
woah... This could be in .. like... english books.
heh sorry
I love it.
~slushy:iconslushy: Apr 29, 2004, 6:31:03 PM
very good :clap: very chilling and spooky. in a good way of course. :)

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:rose: life dripping from its veins... petals fade to black... :blackrose:
~xXSuicidal-SamXx:iconxXSuicidal-SamXx: Apr 29, 2004, 6:35:40 PM
luv it ... gr8 imagery /.... :poke:
~bleedingmirror:iconbleedingmirror: Apr 29, 2004, 7:21:15 PM
Very macabre... :poke:

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